Commentary - The Beginning Of The End - Part One

So I think I went a little over in page length but who cares!

Part One starts with the second time November 26 happened, continuing directly from the end of Phase Three. Some things repeat and some things are different, such is time manipulation and butterflies. I throw the first hint of how they got murdered with the bone. And a bit gruesome, but the running joke was that in each scenario of November 26, Trevor always gets injured. And it's so weird how instead of Trevor being hit in the gut and in the arm, that allows him to scan the field and ask Nox to save three other people.

Then I use the rewind as a legitimate way to reveal the second part of Trevor and Seal's visit to Leona from the first arc. The things being discussed make more sense here so that's why it got held off until now. I had fun with the dialogue because eventually you left wondering at what point is Trevor talking about, the omelet or the scheme or both? I must have had some weird craving at the time and threw in the honeycomb metaphor. But "Bears named Sylar?" had me rolling in laughter when I first thought it of it because I imagined a bear with Quinto's eyebrows.

Trevor's snide remark with 'Punch God in the face' was another favorite line of mine from Sin City. I also tend to use it a lot in real life along with dancing with leprechauns and riding unicorns under a rainbow with the Irish Spring commercial cast. Golden toilets, too. Hmm...but it is also supposed to imply and remind those that Trevor has grown to care more about the faction than going after the agents that killed his fiancee, whose name I never gave away yet.

I still love the Leona and Trevor scenes. He knows he's being manipulated but Leona makes light of it. With everything, Trevor loses it and his power takes over, hence he recites that line about point of view, sorta like with Charlie in "Once Upon A Time in Texas." And to remind the audience about the main story, I put in the line about deja vu. Since this is happening again because of Redo, I'd think a few specials would at least sense something was up. Since Seal is an empath, maybe he would most of all. And no, I don't hate Connecticut. Neither does Trevor, I think he just had low blood sugar or something.

The title, It's All Relativity is definitely a reference to messing with timelines and taking different frames of reference (in this case points of view) to see the big picture. It's the overarching lesson of this arc, which I hope pays off in the finale.

And I guess in a weird twist, Eli appears in the graphic novels and I bust out duplicates. But they had it first since these things are written way ahead of time. Another case of being on the same wavelength.

Blue's death was the big shocker scene. After some events with someone leaving the faction on his own accord, I got a brainstorm and did a rewrite to kill off Blue, his character, and make Sparkplug's anger more justified and tie-in the two are close. There a few hidden homages that are only for fellow Undaunted members. I know one figured them out already. Sparkplug's display of powers is all taken from his HSG bio and for interested parties, he'll come into play in at least Part Three and this death will play a big role in it.

After seeing Ando bust out red lightning in Volume 3, I feel in love with the shiny FX. So I knew it immediately when I read Luna Yu's bio on HSG, I would use her a couple times as I wrote. It was on the to-do list to have this big scene for her when she used the power on a whole heap of people at once.

And always, ton of 9th Wonders! references, good and bad. Undaunted appears to be on the verge of losing its lofty #1 spot but hey, it helped me write an awesome line. And something I don't thing I did in awhile was reference another Undaunted character, Karma. When I was flipping through the roster, I almost thought Undaunted had no healers but we got one! Phew. Trevor would have been in trouble since Nox and Redo died for good this time in the third November 26th.

Lot of people totally got murdered (94 Undaunted and the 36 duplicates=130 deaths) but that is only to tip off the readers that the scales are getting higher, to emulate Trevor's word of caution with Seal in the Diner scenes, and foreshadow the rest of the arc. Ooh, and I kinda hinted at who the enemy is in the line after the Karma reference. Whew, good thing there is a second Garden of the Gods or everyone would be crashing at Mr. and Mrs. Zhang's house.

Earlier, I said this arc will be a four parter, but now after proofing and plotting out, I might tighten it a little and make a three parter. We'll see. I don't plan on making the last part a total downer but to end it on a good note, somehow, whether it's implied or totally out there plain as day. After that, I'm pretty sure I'm going to take the rest of the year off from writing and start fresh posting in January. I say that now, but things can change.