So I think I went a little over in page length but who cares!
Part One starts with the second time November 26 happened, continuing directly from the end of Phase Three. Some things repeat and some things are different, such is time manipulation and butterflies. I throw the first hint of how they got murdered with the bone. And a bit gruesome, but the running joke was that in each scenario of November 26, Trevor always gets injured. And it's so weird how instead of Trevor being hit in the gut and in the arm, that allows him to scan the field and ask Nox to save three other people.
Then I use the rewind as a legitimate way to reveal the second part of Trevor and Seal's visit to Leona from the first arc. The things being discussed make more sense here so that's why it got held off until now. I had fun with the dialogue because eventually you left wondering at what point is Trevor talking about, the omelet or the scheme or both? I must have had some weird craving at the time and threw in the honeycomb metaphor. But "Bears named Sylar?" had me rolling in laughter when I first thought it of it because I imagined a bear with Quinto's eyebrows.
Trevor's snide remark with 'Punch God in the face' was another favorite line of mine from Sin City. I also tend to use it a lot in real life along with dancing with leprechauns and riding unicorns under a rainbow with the Irish Spring commercial cast. Golden toilets, too. Hmm...but it is also supposed to imply and remind those that Trevor has grown to care more about the faction than going after the agents that killed his fiancee, whose name I never gave away yet.
I still love the Leona and Trevor scenes. He knows he's being manipulated but Leona makes light of it. With everything, Trevor loses it and his power takes over, hence he recites that line about point of view, sorta like with Charlie in "Once Upon A Time in Texas." And to remind the audience about the main story, I put in the line about deja vu. Since this is happening again because of Redo, I'd think a few specials would at least sense something was up. Since Seal is an empath, maybe he would most of all. And no, I don't hate Connecticut. Neither does Trevor, I think he just had low blood sugar or something.
The title, It's All Relativity is definitely a reference to messing with timelines and taking different frames of reference (in this case points of view) to see the big picture. It's the overarching lesson of this arc, which I hope pays off in the finale.
And I guess in a weird twist, Eli appears in the graphic novels and I bust out duplicates. But they had it first since these things are written way ahead of time. Another case of being on the same wavelength.
Blue's death was the big shocker scene. After some events with someone leaving the faction on his own accord, I got a brainstorm and did a rewrite to kill off Blue, his character, and make Sparkplug's anger more justified and tie-in the two are close. There a few hidden homages that are only for fellow Undaunted members. I know one figured them out already. Sparkplug's display of powers is all taken from his HSG bio and for interested parties, he'll come into play in at least Part Three and this death will play a big role in it.
After seeing Ando bust out red lightning in Volume 3, I feel in love with the shiny FX. So I knew it immediately when I read Luna Yu's bio on HSG, I would use her a couple times as I wrote. It was on the to-do list to have this big scene for her when she used the power on a whole heap of people at once.
And always, ton of 9th Wonders! references, good and bad. Undaunted appears to be on the verge of losing its lofty #1 spot but hey, it helped me write an awesome line. And something I don't thing I did in awhile was reference another Undaunted character, Karma. When I was flipping through the roster, I almost thought Undaunted had no healers but we got one! Phew. Trevor would have been in trouble since Nox and Redo died for good this time in the third November 26th.
Lot of people totally got murdered (94 Undaunted and the 36 duplicates=130 deaths) but that is only to tip off the readers that the scales are getting higher, to emulate Trevor's word of caution with Seal in the Diner scenes, and foreshadow the rest of the arc. Ooh, and I kinda hinted at who the enemy is in the line after the Karma reference. Whew, good thing there is a second Garden of the Gods or everyone would be crashing at Mr. and Mrs. Zhang's house.
Earlier, I said this arc will be a four parter, but now after proofing and plotting out, I might tighten it a little and make a three parter. We'll see. I don't plan on making the last part a total downer but to end it on a good note, somehow, whether it's implied or totally out there plain as day. After that, I'm pretty sure I'm going to take the rest of the year off from writing and start fresh posting in January. I say that now, but things can change.
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November 24, 2009
October 27, 2009
Trevor in iStory
iStory 605
So after everything that was happening, I wake up to a cryptic Private Message from HERO on 9th Wonders. Wondering what the heck is going on, I check out the newest iStory and find out Trevor was used in an iStory. I was proud as fuck and so honored to be chosen from 4000+ characters. I thanked Mr. Inkel, thanked God, Buddha, Vishnu, and the Powers That Be. Mr. Inkel got Trevor down to the T and linked his involvement up nicely to what was going on in Book Six. And to top it off, he kicked butt. It was a great day for me and made me even more into writing more stories.
So after everything that was happening, I wake up to a cryptic Private Message from HERO on 9th Wonders. Wondering what the heck is going on, I check out the newest iStory and find out Trevor was used in an iStory. I was proud as fuck and so honored to be chosen from 4000+ characters. I thanked Mr. Inkel, thanked God, Buddha, Vishnu, and the Powers That Be. Mr. Inkel got Trevor down to the T and linked his involvement up nicely to what was going on in Book Six. And to top it off, he kicked butt. It was a great day for me and made me even more into writing more stories.
Part Three - Undaunted Part One
And so, as I planned from the start, I was going to write stories about Trevor and naturally I integrated them into when I joined with the faction, Undaunted. Why did I join that faction? A few reasons, 1) the bio fitted with where I wanted to take Trevor's story to the next level and 2) I'm a fan of the creator, HERO. I tend to gravitate towards kindred who have similar psychopathic tendencies. When I first joined 9th Wonders, I saw all this work and screen grabs that HERO contributes and figured this person was a moderator or Tim Kring in disguise. And don't tease me for revealing this HERO, ;P Of course, there are some people that point out Undaunted is #1 and is a sure way to boost your rank. I say to that, it doesn't matter what faction you join, you still have to answer those messages.
Anyway, here's part one. In [ ] are my notes and references I sneaked in. Commentary to come in a separate post. Enjoy.
[Notes]
Trevor - There is a surprise. It has a major impact. After the fact, the event is rationalized by hindsight as if it had been expected.
[Black Swan Events]
Distant shot of Peter Petrelli exploding in the sky above Kirby Plaza.
[Volume One "How to Stop An Exploding Man"]
LATE SUMMER 2007
[Bridge between iStory Book Six and Volume Five]
LOS ANGELES, CALIFORNIA
A steam punk, cobbled together room not unlike main room from Nebuchadnezzar in The Matrix movie.
Kurt Hasian - "This place is definitely a Craig's List must buy."
[Craig's List]
Carson Ford - "Two more dead. Not even with us for more than a month."
Trevor looks away from two others into a flat screen computer monitor.
Trevor - "People die in the morning, they are born in the evening, like foam on the water."
[Kamo no Chomei, Hojoki (1212), An Account of My Hut]
Carson Ford, clearly a polar opposite of Trevor, looks annoyed at his comment.
Carson Ford - "That's so callous."
Kurt Hasian - "Dude, he already knew it was going to happen sooner or later. It was possible. He had strategies on what to do after the murders before any of us could blink…he's…"
[Lost, Hurley, Dude]
Kurt Hasian is clearly a 'fan' of Trevor. Ford cuts him off.
Carson Ford - "I thought he just remembers stuff, not dreams about the future!"
[Heroes, Angela Petrelli, Precognitive Dreaming]
Kurt Hasian - "Nah, it only starts as memory. Remembering all those numbers, details, images…his brain can process them into actions and plan scenarios. He's like an advance scout, tactician, and general all wrapped up in one. He knows what our next move should be. Look, Seal gets him. That's enough for me. It should be for you, too."
[Heroes Survival Game, Undaunted, Seal]
Trevor types away, not listening to them at all.
Trevor - "They were being followed for days. They didn't know but they were chosen to die. Someone thought they had intel. Assassinated them. Picked through their belongings. Took their wallets to make it look like a robbery. Probably dumped them a couple blocks away. We'll find the wallets. He'll read them. We find the target."
Carson Ford - "It sounds so convenient. Not everything's one big coincidence. It could be just retribution for that thing with Mags."
[Heroes Evolutions, iStory Book Six, Chapter Three "Wild Things"]
Trevor - "There are no coincidences. Just the illusion of coincidence."
[V for Vendetta]
Kurt Hasian - "I totally saw this on CSI once. If it was retribution, the bodies wouldn't be manipulated. The human body doesn't fall like that from a headshot. If this was revenge, they'd be left alone, displayed like war trophies."
[CSI]
They stare at him in silence. He looks down and scratches the back of his head, embarrassed.
Trevor - "This isn't just a faction. It's an army, too. They were the front line. Expendable. Replaceable. Us? Not so much. Stay around long enough and you become too important. A bunch of us gets killed, the faction has to start all over again. We're human. They're human. We all had normal lives. Dreams. Friends. Family. I had a life before this. Kept my power a secret. Even used to have a sense of humor. I had love. Had it and lost it. Answers. Truth. It's all I wanted. I tried it before with my emotions. But it led to revenge and I became a killer. A monster. To make sure it didn't happen again, I had to remove emotion from the equation. It's called clinical detachment in medical school. I could be objective. See everything. Cause. Effect. Action. Reaction. Scenarios. Alternatives. Possibilities. Black Swan Events. Every piece has its part."
[X-Files and Black Swan Events]
Carson Ford calms down and smiles.
Carson Ford - "But aren't you ever curious to see how it all plays out?"
Trevor - "There are bad people out there. I can't afford to leave it to The Powers That Be."
[Angel]
Kurt Hasian - "Contact us the usual way when things come together. We're going to the Garden with James.
[9th Wonders Board, Heroes Survival, Factions, Undaunted, The Garden of the Gods]
[Heroes Survival Game, Undaunted, Teleporter]
JUNE 2, 2007
China.
A cliff that overlooks a vibrant, seemingly endless forest. Contrasts the previous scene in all possible ways. A monk walks up behind to a man sitting near the cliff.
Roughly translated from Mandarin.
Monk - "What holds the parts together is the mind. The mind must be the strings which hold together all. Learn to connect. See forest and tree."
[Chikamatsu Monzaemon and Peter F. Drucker]
Trevor closes his eyes in disbelief.
Monk - "You have been here for three months. But you do not say who you are or what you are searching for."
Trevor - "Why do you think I'm here?"
Monk - "The pull of the soul."
[Volume One, Mohinder Suresh, Zugunruhe]
The monk continues on the path.
Trevor looks out to the forest.
[Volume One, Narration]
Trevor - Where does it come from? This quest, this need to solve life's mysteries…When the simplest of questions can never be answered.
Trevor holds his dead girlfriend in his arms.
[Heroes Survival Game, Biography - September 26, 2006]
Trevor - Why are we here? What is the soul? Why do we dream?
Close up from Trevor's point of view. Looking down into a Sprint cell phone. The screen shows his Assignment Tracker 2.0 profile.
[Sprint, Assignment Tracker 2, Heroes Survival Game, Biography - November 26, 2006]
Trevor - Perhaps we'd be better off not looking at all. Not delving, not yearning.
Trevor watches Kaito Nakamura's funeral from a headstone with the TANAKA Kanji on it.
[Volume Two "Powerless" and Heroes Survival Game, Biography - March 20, 2007]
Trevor - But that's not human nature. Not the human heart. That is not why we are here.
Close up on Hiro Nakamura as he gives his eulogy for his father.
[Volume Two "Powerless" and Heroes Survival Game, Biography - March 20, 2007]
Trevor - We dream of hope, We dream of change, of fire, of love, of death.
Various headshots of Undaunted members in different parts of the world.
[Heroes Survival Game, Undaunted]
Trevor - And then it happens. The dream becomes real.
The iconic eclipse.
[Heroes, Motif, The Eclipse]
Trevor - And the answer to this quest, this need to solve life's mysteries finally shows itself…
Trevor's hand reaches out to another (Victor). Hands hold. Trevor's shifts away.
[iStory Book Four and Heroes Survival Game, Biography - June 8, 2007]
Trevor - Like the glowing light of a new dawn.
Leona Mills' hand reaches out and opens the top of a coffin from the inside.
So much struggle for meaning, for purpose, and in the end,
Mags walks along a sidewalk. She bumps into someone.
[Heroes Survival Game]
We find it only in each other.
The man Mags bumped into is Seal. He smiles at her like he used his power on her.
He motions to her into an alley. In the distance, Building 26 Special Agents are closing in on them. Possibly Kent Harper's team.
[Volume Four and Heroes Survival Game]
Trevor - Our shared experience of the fantastic, and the mundane.
2006 on a hanging banner. Bank. Trevor works at a bank. Sitting behind him are Company agents, Julia Ryan and Lukas Bahn talking to a bank stooge. Bahn has his head slightly turned toward Trevor.
[Heroes Survival Game, Biography - January 2006 and Heroes Evolutions, Evsdropper]
Trevor - The simple need to find a kindred, to connect.
Case jumps forward into a sunrise with glee.
[Heroes Survival Game]
A light 'leaks' out of the dirt near Trevor.
Trevor - And to know in out hearts that we are not alone.
Trevor digs up a cell phone. He brushes dirt off the screen. Close up to the screen. It reads: "1 New Message."
UNDAUNTED - in Heroes title font - graces across the panel.
PRESENT
Trevor - When defeat overtakes a man, the easiest and most logical thing to do is quit. That is exactly what the majority of men do.
[Napoleon Hill]
Shot over his shoulder. The screen shows a home page for Cisco security camera feeds like Bob Bishop's from Volume Two. A smaller square reads: "You're Welcome." Each corner of the square has a star and a faded hammer imprint in the center of the background. The square disappears.
[Volume Two and iStory Book Four]
Trevor - Success is a function of the sincerity of the mission. Without a meaningful purpose, action leads to disappointment and frustration. Yet, when focused upon a compelling reason, action always results in achievement.
Close up on Trevor. He wears a concerned face, like seeing a ghost from his past, almost a tinge of anger seething from his eyes.
The reveal on screen: Eric Thompson Jr. with a sniper rifle.
[Heroes Evolutions, Evsdropper and iStory Book Six]
TO BE CONTINUED - in Heroes font
Anyway, here's part one. In [ ] are my notes and references I sneaked in. Commentary to come in a separate post. Enjoy.
[Notes]
Trevor - There is a surprise. It has a major impact. After the fact, the event is rationalized by hindsight as if it had been expected.
[Black Swan Events]
Distant shot of Peter Petrelli exploding in the sky above Kirby Plaza.
[Volume One "How to Stop An Exploding Man"]
LATE SUMMER 2007
[Bridge between iStory Book Six and Volume Five]
LOS ANGELES, CALIFORNIA
A steam punk, cobbled together room not unlike main room from Nebuchadnezzar in The Matrix movie.
Kurt Hasian - "This place is definitely a Craig's List must buy."
[Craig's List]
Carson Ford - "Two more dead. Not even with us for more than a month."
Trevor looks away from two others into a flat screen computer monitor.
Trevor - "People die in the morning, they are born in the evening, like foam on the water."
[Kamo no Chomei, Hojoki (1212), An Account of My Hut]
Carson Ford, clearly a polar opposite of Trevor, looks annoyed at his comment.
Carson Ford - "That's so callous."
Kurt Hasian - "Dude, he already knew it was going to happen sooner or later. It was possible. He had strategies on what to do after the murders before any of us could blink…he's…"
[Lost, Hurley, Dude]
Kurt Hasian is clearly a 'fan' of Trevor. Ford cuts him off.
Carson Ford - "I thought he just remembers stuff, not dreams about the future!"
[Heroes, Angela Petrelli, Precognitive Dreaming]
Kurt Hasian - "Nah, it only starts as memory. Remembering all those numbers, details, images…his brain can process them into actions and plan scenarios. He's like an advance scout, tactician, and general all wrapped up in one. He knows what our next move should be. Look, Seal gets him. That's enough for me. It should be for you, too."
[Heroes Survival Game, Undaunted, Seal]
Trevor types away, not listening to them at all.
Trevor - "They were being followed for days. They didn't know but they were chosen to die. Someone thought they had intel. Assassinated them. Picked through their belongings. Took their wallets to make it look like a robbery. Probably dumped them a couple blocks away. We'll find the wallets. He'll read them. We find the target."
Carson Ford - "It sounds so convenient. Not everything's one big coincidence. It could be just retribution for that thing with Mags."
[Heroes Evolutions, iStory Book Six, Chapter Three "Wild Things"]
Trevor - "There are no coincidences. Just the illusion of coincidence."
[V for Vendetta]
Kurt Hasian - "I totally saw this on CSI once. If it was retribution, the bodies wouldn't be manipulated. The human body doesn't fall like that from a headshot. If this was revenge, they'd be left alone, displayed like war trophies."
[CSI]
They stare at him in silence. He looks down and scratches the back of his head, embarrassed.
Trevor - "This isn't just a faction. It's an army, too. They were the front line. Expendable. Replaceable. Us? Not so much. Stay around long enough and you become too important. A bunch of us gets killed, the faction has to start all over again. We're human. They're human. We all had normal lives. Dreams. Friends. Family. I had a life before this. Kept my power a secret. Even used to have a sense of humor. I had love. Had it and lost it. Answers. Truth. It's all I wanted. I tried it before with my emotions. But it led to revenge and I became a killer. A monster. To make sure it didn't happen again, I had to remove emotion from the equation. It's called clinical detachment in medical school. I could be objective. See everything. Cause. Effect. Action. Reaction. Scenarios. Alternatives. Possibilities. Black Swan Events. Every piece has its part."
[X-Files and Black Swan Events]
Carson Ford calms down and smiles.
Carson Ford - "But aren't you ever curious to see how it all plays out?"
Trevor - "There are bad people out there. I can't afford to leave it to The Powers That Be."
[Angel]
Kurt Hasian - "Contact us the usual way when things come together. We're going to the Garden with James.
[9th Wonders Board, Heroes Survival, Factions, Undaunted, The Garden of the Gods]
[Heroes Survival Game, Undaunted, Teleporter]
JUNE 2, 2007
China.
A cliff that overlooks a vibrant, seemingly endless forest. Contrasts the previous scene in all possible ways. A monk walks up behind to a man sitting near the cliff.
Roughly translated from Mandarin.
Monk - "What holds the parts together is the mind. The mind must be the strings which hold together all. Learn to connect. See forest and tree."
[Chikamatsu Monzaemon and Peter F. Drucker]
Trevor closes his eyes in disbelief.
Monk - "You have been here for three months. But you do not say who you are or what you are searching for."
Trevor - "Why do you think I'm here?"
Monk - "The pull of the soul."
[Volume One, Mohinder Suresh, Zugunruhe]
The monk continues on the path.
Trevor looks out to the forest.
[Volume One, Narration]
Trevor - Where does it come from? This quest, this need to solve life's mysteries…When the simplest of questions can never be answered.
Trevor holds his dead girlfriend in his arms.
[Heroes Survival Game, Biography - September 26, 2006]
Trevor - Why are we here? What is the soul? Why do we dream?
Close up from Trevor's point of view. Looking down into a Sprint cell phone. The screen shows his Assignment Tracker 2.0 profile.
[Sprint, Assignment Tracker 2, Heroes Survival Game, Biography - November 26, 2006]
Trevor - Perhaps we'd be better off not looking at all. Not delving, not yearning.
Trevor watches Kaito Nakamura's funeral from a headstone with the TANAKA Kanji on it.
[Volume Two "Powerless" and Heroes Survival Game, Biography - March 20, 2007]
Trevor - But that's not human nature. Not the human heart. That is not why we are here.
Close up on Hiro Nakamura as he gives his eulogy for his father.
[Volume Two "Powerless" and Heroes Survival Game, Biography - March 20, 2007]
Trevor - We dream of hope, We dream of change, of fire, of love, of death.
Various headshots of Undaunted members in different parts of the world.
[Heroes Survival Game, Undaunted]
Trevor - And then it happens. The dream becomes real.
The iconic eclipse.
[Heroes, Motif, The Eclipse]
Trevor - And the answer to this quest, this need to solve life's mysteries finally shows itself…
Trevor's hand reaches out to another (Victor). Hands hold. Trevor's shifts away.
[iStory Book Four and Heroes Survival Game, Biography - June 8, 2007]
Trevor - Like the glowing light of a new dawn.
Leona Mills' hand reaches out and opens the top of a coffin from the inside.
So much struggle for meaning, for purpose, and in the end,
Mags walks along a sidewalk. She bumps into someone.
[Heroes Survival Game]
We find it only in each other.
The man Mags bumped into is Seal. He smiles at her like he used his power on her.
He motions to her into an alley. In the distance, Building 26 Special Agents are closing in on them. Possibly Kent Harper's team.
[Volume Four and Heroes Survival Game]
Trevor - Our shared experience of the fantastic, and the mundane.
2006 on a hanging banner. Bank. Trevor works at a bank. Sitting behind him are Company agents, Julia Ryan and Lukas Bahn talking to a bank stooge. Bahn has his head slightly turned toward Trevor.
[Heroes Survival Game, Biography - January 2006 and Heroes Evolutions, Evsdropper]
Trevor - The simple need to find a kindred, to connect.
Case jumps forward into a sunrise with glee.
[Heroes Survival Game]
A light 'leaks' out of the dirt near Trevor.
Trevor - And to know in out hearts that we are not alone.
Trevor digs up a cell phone. He brushes dirt off the screen. Close up to the screen. It reads: "1 New Message."
UNDAUNTED - in Heroes title font - graces across the panel.
PRESENT
Trevor - When defeat overtakes a man, the easiest and most logical thing to do is quit. That is exactly what the majority of men do.
[Napoleon Hill]
Shot over his shoulder. The screen shows a home page for Cisco security camera feeds like Bob Bishop's from Volume Two. A smaller square reads: "You're Welcome." Each corner of the square has a star and a faded hammer imprint in the center of the background. The square disappears.
[Volume Two and iStory Book Four]
Trevor - Success is a function of the sincerity of the mission. Without a meaningful purpose, action leads to disappointment and frustration. Yet, when focused upon a compelling reason, action always results in achievement.
Close up on Trevor. He wears a concerned face, like seeing a ghost from his past, almost a tinge of anger seething from his eyes.
The reveal on screen: Eric Thompson Jr. with a sniper rifle.
[Heroes Evolutions, Evsdropper and iStory Book Six]
TO BE CONTINUED - in Heroes font
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